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That is really great Pinks :-4
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Nice Pinky, creates a good visual.
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Pinky;544431 wrote: Thanks Suz...That's been lurking on my Pc for a couple of months now.

What did you like about it?


Sorry for the delay was watching TV, I'm not too great with my words, but I felt as though I was in that situation, your words took me there, to a place where you wonder if everything is going by without you being in the game, wondering if you are going to find that special person before it's too late. (I have no doubt the kids could explain better,it made sense to me!)

Sorry Pinks, best I could do, I talk far better than I can write!:(
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Pinky;544418 wrote: She stands on the shores

of a barren plain

Looks out to sea

everyday in vain

the landscape echoes

all she is inside;

an empty forest

the cold, numbing tide.

sunlight warms her

to no avail

A brave knight indeed

who would tread this trail.

Did she ever really know the touch

of real,true love?

She can only compare as much

to the bloom of a rose, the flight of a dove.

Nothing tangible,

nothing to remember

nothing of value

in perennial December.

The thorns are too vast now

to be overthrown

the forest too deep

and too overgrown.

Unreachable now?

Time will tell

the tide could grow

the ocean could swell

and maybe yet overthrow

the prison imposed

by the detainee -

If she were so disposed

to open the gates, set herself free.
A classy as ever Pinky and to your usual standard. Your work betrays your sadness and makes me wanna put my arms around you :yh_hugs


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Pinky;544585 wrote: Thankyoumate. When you did put your arms around me, it was morev than a feelng.:-4
Hey, Don't get all Boston on me :wah:


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Pinky;544613 wrote: Don't worry, not tht type of girl.
You do realise I can't get that song out of my head now :rolleyes: :D


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Why doesn't she just become an hero?
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