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theia
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Pinky;507833 wrote: When life makes no sense

You are there. When cold winds

bite, you shield me, the blanket

I always wished I had.

I pray you're always there

to hold onto when the seas get rough.

You've shown me beauty in life,

the sunrise was never so bold or

magnificent as when you made me really see it

for the first time, with eyes opened anew.

I beheld frost like glass, fresh morning dew.

Sunset is miles away, a memory

yet to come. I know I can only be summer to you

not all four seasons, yet I don't care.

Come rain or shine, your thoughts warm my heart

and make me feel more aware.

Like last years' leaves turning to smoke

I know you'll be gone soon.

Rising from the flames in one final stand

I wish you'll be brave enough

to stand up, take my hand

when the stars pause in their obrit

and time stands still

as I know without shadow

of a doubt it certainly will.

Even if I never set eyes on you evermore

I'll remember you. Engraved in my mind

are the words you left me

always courteous and kind,

I'll always seek your bounty to find.


That is lovely, Pinky...the lines I've highlighted are particularly poignant to me
Live the questions now. Perhaps you will then gradually, without noticing it, live along some distant day into the answers...Rainer Maria Rilke
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Gosh Pinky. That's lovely. But sad too. I wish you a life of a million smiles.
"Life is too short to ski with ugly men"

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Loved it Pinky, have to say I think it was one of your best ever.:-6
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That is really good actually, its moving without being too sentimental, and there is a lot of emotional energy coming through there, and its quite evocative. I think you have talent pinky.
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Pinky is very talented, it's such a beautiful poem.

:)
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