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KB.
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Good imagry (sp), nice word play, and allusion. Ghouls are always a plus as well.
Life ain't linear.
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Crikey Pinky!! That is excellent, you have real talent.:-6




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That was really good Pinks :-6
I am nobody..nobody is perfect...therefore I must be Perfect!





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Pinky;634022 wrote: Thanks...it's kind of cathartic...had one of those days:-5


Oh dear, hope it made you feel better:-3 anyway i really lked it, i think i liked the style of it if you know what i mean




FOC THREAD PART1

In the end, we will remember not the words of our enemies, but the silence of our friends.

Martin Luther King Jr.
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Just read that, really good :-4
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Pinky;634005 wrote: You painted me

with shades of gold,

gave me feathered wings

I knew you then

from days of old;

knew the misery you'd bring.

Placed me on a pedestal

impossibly too far, too high

just to see me flail and fall

into eyes as blue as sky.

I tried to avoid you,

blocked you out

swore not to notice you

never let myself doubt

my own mind.

I'll hate you, despise you,

hide from you

the only thing left

that I can do.

The years fall away,

gone in an instant

staring, falling into twin oceans,

those bottomless topaz eyes

drowning out the world.

An eternity passed

while the universe froze

like the lump of ice

that was once a heart.

It again breaks it's stitches,

shards and slivers

of myriad mirrors,

shattering.

Cupid's own bow

the cruelest of tools

could never yet pierce

as fast nor deep as you.

Love and hate, swirling, erupting

so many shades of red

from the pit of my stomach

to explode in my head

as lips of velvet

touch mine

one last time

one last memory

bleeding out my soul -

comdenming me to walk

among the truly alive

nothing but a faded ghoul.


That hurts Pinky. :-4 :-4
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