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Post by Mustang »

And this is wrong because! You are just being your self?

Great job with this post well put. ;) :) Why should you be some one you are not! Just be your self. :)
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Glad to meet ya. :)

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Hiya Koochikoo. Liked the poem, it paints a very clear picture. Think that as a poem it would be better if you cut the first six lines and started "I'll never fit in with "ladies"/ In high society..." Because it seems to me that the point about this character is that she has accepted who she is and is comfortable with it. The first six lines rather contradict this...?

That's just my opinion, though. I liked the way it pulled no punches.
The crowd: "Yes! We are all individuals!"

Lone voice: "I'm not."
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