The Message

koan
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The Message

Post by koan »

A bottle floats upon a wave

A message there inside

The message may seem trite at first

It merely says "I cried."

But with those words a fortress falls

That kept me safe for years

The only weakness in its walls

Was wrought by my own tears

But is it such a scary thing

To face the world unclothed?

To try and find compassion

For all the things I loathed?

And if an arrow strikes me down

I'm sure that I will heal

There are some chances I must take

If I want a world that's real.
polycarp
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Joined: Tue Jan 04, 2005 9:00 am

The Message

Post by polycarp »

Koan, I can't help but call this a masterpiece. It's awesome and the message it bears couldn't be put better in my opinion.
A formula for tact: "Be brief politely, be aggressive smilingly, be emphatic pleasantly, be positive diplomatically, be right graciously".

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