Group Poetry 2

koan
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Post by koan »

Fire and force, the winds of time

Scatter the pieces of my mind.

For all that was will never be

It's time has passed and set me free.
Cass
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Post by Cass »

koan wrote:

Fire and force, the winds of time

Scatter the pieces of my mind.

For all that was will never be

It's time has passed and set me free.
Free to start anew my life

Take on new challenges, free from strife

Feel the promise of each new day

Chains of the past, have gone away.
Bullet
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Post by Bullet »

The Gift Of Life


This gift I have recieved
Had me thoroughly decieved
I was caught in a web of delusion
It was when I tripped and fell
Into the gates of hell
That I saw it was all an illusion


Self rightious hypocrite's rules
They use their ancient tools
Of guilt, piety and confusion
The truth they claim to teach
Stifles our spirit not to reach
A position to see an obvious solution


When it is all said and done
We'll all have had our fun
Just don't let others become an intrusion
So when you've finished out your days
Try to go out in a blaze
And your gift will come to a conclusion
Death is more universal than life. For although everyone dies, not everyone truly lives.
koan
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Post by koan »

Very nice but group poetry is supposed to be an expansion of what was already written.

Fire and force, the winds of time

Scatter the pieces of my mind.

For all that was will never be

It's time has passed and set me free.

Free to start anew my life

Take on new challenges, free from strife

Feel the promise of each new day

Chains of the past, have gone away.

Sweet scent of mystery,

No sense of history,

I long for change to light the way

I fight no more and seize the day
Bullet
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Post by Bullet »

Oops, sorry
Death is more universal than life. For although everyone dies, not everyone truly lives.
polycarp
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Post by polycarp »

Fire and force, the winds of time

Scatter the pieces of my mind.

For all that was will never be

It's time has passed and set me free.

Free to start anew my life

Take on new challenges, free from strife

Feel the promise of each new day

Chains of the past, have gone away.

Sweet scent of mystery,

No sense of history,

I long for change to light the way

I fight no more and seize the day

For flying robins that sweetly sing

And fragrant flowers on twigs which swing

On a bright and glorious day

Tell of blessed moments coming my way
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koan
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Post by koan »

We got 5 stars!!!!!

I don't want to change the ending. We just need a title and a new poem. Good one guys!

What about "Sweet Submission" ?
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rachelg
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Post by rachelg »

This one is even better than the last one :) This is one of the coolest things I've seen. I wish I could write :o

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