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icebloo
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For everyone who looked at my site..thanks for the constructive critizism.

Name: a poetry lover

Email:

Date: Tue May 9 09:14:25 GMT-12:00 2006

Absolute crap.



Name: a person of taste

Email:

Date: Tue May 9 09:21:17 GMT-12:00 2006

Juvenile rubbish, should have flushed it down the pan.
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abbey
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Post by abbey »

icebloo wrote: For everyone who looked at my site..thanks for the constructive critizism.



Name: a poetry lover

Email:

Date: Tue May 9 09:14:25 GMT-12:00 2006



Absolute crap.





Name: a person of taste

Email:

Date: Tue May 9 09:21:17 GMT-12:00 2006



Juvenile rubbish, should have flushed it down the pan.That's a shame. :(
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chonsigirl
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Post by chonsigirl »

Ice, write your poetry and do not worry what others say.

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icebloo
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Post by icebloo »

but they were from ppl here...is my poetry really that bad?

Start anew

Feeling the pain,

Knowing that you deserve it.

Not one tear falls. My eyes start to strain,

the pain is worsening. My adreniline can not fit

inside of me anymore. I must refrain

from a piercing scream. Like a slap across the face, it hit

with a sting. Not one grain

of happiness is left. Why do I inflict

this upon my self? Why am I never sane?

Something clicked,

my tears came pouring down. I drain

myself of hope. I have mimicked

what I wish not to be. So much pain and yet not one gain.



Why do

I do this?

I sue

myself of happiness. I miss

how I used to be. Against my will, I grew

and changed into a horrible person. I diss

myself every chane I get. I knew

then, not to

do this, not to put myslelf down, yet it flew

in one ear, out the other. Tell me, how do I start anew?
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chonsigirl
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Post by chonsigirl »

Ice, there are numerous poetry sites where fellow writers can critique your works. Everyone doesn't read and comment on poetry here, but on the numerous threads. If you want some links to poetry sites, PM me and I will send you some where I post.

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